[Writingworkshop] Good Old Speak

[Antony Nigel Donovan]

So, I've been listening to this (a lot) since I like it (a lot) and I
realized something you might want to change.

Dog people would never refer to their dog as "it."  Unless you think
it's important to stick with "it" for some reason, I think you should
change it to "him" or "her."

Antony

PS - Of course, maybe you should do that for the goldfish instead, and
leave the dog an "it."  Surrealism might demand it.

On Tue, 2008-02-19 at 16:38 -0500, Neale Morison wrote:
> Oldspeak turns out to be a Country and Western Song (I like both kinds 
> of music):
> 
> Good Old Speak
> 
> I want to own a goldfish,
> So I can call it Fluffy,
> I want to own a red dog,
> So I can call it Blue,
> I'm filing the invasion
> Under L for liberation,
> I have a perfect vision;
> I want to call it you.
> 
> I have you in sakekeeping
> For your own protection,
> I built a wall around us,
> I'm calling it a home,
> Hush, my darling, quiet now
> So I can tell you're happy,
> As long as you have me dear,
> You'll never be alone.
> 
> So many voices, so many choices,
> There is nothing to fear but fear,
> So much dying, so much crying,
> Why I really have no idea,
> 
> I'm sharpening my bayonet,
> To be on the defensive,
> When I am six feet under,
> The sky will be above,
> I sacrifice my everything
> In the name of freedom,
> I have an aching feeling,
> I want to call it love.
> 
> I want to own a goldfish,
> So I can call it Fluffy,
> I want to own a red dog,
> So I can call it Blue,
> I'm filing the invasion
> Under L for liberation,
> I have a perfect vision;
> I want to call it you.
> 
> Rough as guts recording (5Mb mp3):
> http://nealemorison.org/music/goodoldspeak/GoodOldSpeak3.MP3
>