[Writingworkshop] Tracking

[Neale Morison]

Thanks Antony. I appreciate the feedback. That was one of the issues I 
was concerned about. I started him off easy and he just turned into a 
monster. I think it was the rum and coke. There's one lonely geek who 
can't handle a drink.
Antony Nigel Donovan wrote:
> I read the story and something wasn't working for me.  At first, I
> couldn't figure out what it was.  The characters are well drawn.  The
> subject matter is interesting and relevant.  Then it hit me:  I know the
> narrator, and I don't like him.  I don't identify with him and I don't
> want to try.
>
> So, something to consider:  tell the same story but from Tessa's POV.  I
> believe I would find it much easier to identify with her and her
> situation.
>
> That's my take overall take.
>
> Antony.
>
> PS - I've been meaning to read and respond to "The Uncomfortablists",
> but I'm finding it difficult to put aside the time it deserves.  Sorry
> about that.  
>
> On Wed, 2009-04-29 at 08:05 -0400, Adam Holland wrote:
>   
>> well done!
>> I look forward to reading  it.
>> I got a great idea for a story while studying for exams, and will
>> probably try to write it as soon as they are over.
>>
>>
>> On Wed, Apr 29, 2009 at 7:42 AM, Neale Morison
>> <neale at nealemorison.com> wrote:
>>         I wrote a first draft of  ~4000 word short story this week:
>>         
>>         http://www.nealemorison.com/writing/shortstories/Tracking.pdf
>>         
>>         
>>         
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>>         Neale Morison
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