[Writingworkshop] And?

[Neale Morison]

I've been saying this aloud to myself and I take back the crack about 
the last line. There's definitely a nice rhythm throughout. Nice one 
Daniel. I think was just looking for an excuse to drop in the limerick.

Thank you for choosing pain, Adam. It becomes you. You've inspired me to 
try and find the reference, and although I did not, I did read more 
Sappho than I ever have before, and it's all very fine. I found a few 
that seemed related. Her much translated poem of jealousy seemed like a 
candidate:
http://www.bopsecrets.org/gateway/passages/sappho.htm
Tell you what, the Mary Barnard translation is hot.

hearing only my own ears
drumming, I drip with sweat;
trembling shakes my body



http://www.gutenberg.org/files/12389/12389.txt
>
>     Daniel Peters wrote:
>>     come with the thunder
>>     /from /under whatever /you're/ hiding
>>     where were you when
>>     who you were mattered
>>     only cause
>>     just because
>>     please don't suppose
>>     there is no way to find the way
>>     that finds the way you /want/ to be
>

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