[Writingworkshop] Last Person Singular

[Antony Nigel Donovan]

I found a couple of typos (but didn't write them down because I didn't
want to interrupt my reading).  I also found a few awkward spots (ibid).

I think it's a very good story in the AI genre.  It seems to evolve
naturally towards a conclusion that isn't obvious, which is very good.
And you managed an ending interpretable as happy.  Bravo. 

My only concern is that some of my appreciation of the story is related
to my knowledge of the man on whom the narrator is modeled. Oh, and that
the story is running close to eleven thousand words.  I can't think of
how you'd cut it down to 7500 (standard max for great stories by
non-name authors).

Antony

On Fri, 2009-06-19 at 10:52 -0400, Adam Holland wrote:
> wow!
> 
> Excited to read it.
> And I hope to have some comments on the Uncomfortablists soon.
> 
> On Fri, Jun 19, 2009 at 10:20 AM, Neale Morison
> <neale at nealemorison.com> wrote:
>         http://www.nealemorison.com/writing/shortstories/LastPersonSingular.pdf
>         
>         The lead character in this story is someone you may recognize
>         from Joe Haldeman's forum. He's been very helpful and reviewed
>         it. He says he doesn't find it intrusive or exploitative.
>         
>         I looked back over the forum posts and I asked him if I could
>         use him on 18 May. After I finished off Specs on 23rd May I
>         spent a week and a half thinking about this and  started
>         writing  on  3rd June. This took 12 days at a little over 850
>         words a day for the first draft. Then I trickled out  a second
>         draft with minor tweaks at couple of hundred words a day.
>         
>         I'm starting to get over the compulsion to keep on going
>         without a break for fear I'll never finish the story. It's a
>         reasonable fear though. I have a long backlog of things
>         started and not finished.
>         
>         I sent Specs to Asimov Magazine. We shall see.
>         
>         All the best,
>         Neale
>         
>         -- 
>         Neale Morison
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