[Writingworkshop] Surviving

[Neale Morison]

Thanks for the corrections, Antony. There was another big one, because 
it turns out that Neanderthal DNA is already partly sequenced. Over 1% 
of the genome. And they've done the mitochondrial DNA, which more or 
less clinches that Neanderthals and humans didn't interbreed much to 
speak of.
So version 0.2 is up:

http://www.nealemorison.com/writing/shortstories/Surviving.pdf



Antony Nigel Donovan wrote:
> And, not unlike a fungus, he's beginning to grow on me.
>
> He's less annoying in this piece and more pitifully pathetic.  If you
> keep going with this I think he might become an intriguing character.
> Although, I'm not sure people would read past the annoying parts, so
> there's a risk.
>
> But, maybe they won't have to.  If later stories stand on their own.
>
> Line edits:  2.6, You voice => Your voice; 4.1, the don't talk about
> that => they don't talk about that.
>
> Thanks for keeping at this.  It's inspiring, even if the inspiration
> hasn't transmogrified into actual prose on the page.
>
> Antony
>
> On Thu, 2009-05-07 at 22:25 +1000, Neale Morison wrote:
>   
>> David Manning was so annoying I thought he needed another outing.
>>
>> http://www.nealemorison.com/writing/shortstories/Surviving.pdf
>>
>>     
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