[Writingworkshop] Last Person Singular slight tweaks

[Daniel Peters]

manfred clynes  check him.

On Fri, Jul 24, 2009 at 9:36 PM, Neale Morison <neale at nealemorison.com>wrote:

> This isn't a major rewrite. I just added a final conversation between
> Colleen and Nick. I think it focuses the ideas a little and adds a missing
> emotional element. It's also an opportunity for one of my worst puns ever.
>
> I added some more nerdspeak about the technology. I changed the bit about
> Colleen conducting Psi to include a reference to the outrageous work of the
> amazing Manfred Clynes. This is a man who played piano for Albert Einstein,
> was a mate of Pablo Casals and Marvin Minsky, invented the term cyborg and
> gave the world the sentics button, which I recently purchased from his
> website after losing the one he gave me in the eighties.
> http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Manfred_Clynes
>
> I think this version is an improvement. I would love to know if anyone else
> can see a difference or an improvement.
>
> http://www.nealemorison.com/writing/shortstories/LastPersonSingular.pdf
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